Friday, July 25, 2008

sound of two birds crying

still working this one through. need help!

being with you
reminds me
of the sound of two birds crying
they sit on a telephone wire
and watch all the other birds
in perfect pairs
trace the arc of the sky

i dunno. there's a bit in my head about one bird unable to fly fast enough, the other unable to fly high enough, but i don't know if this says enough on it's own, or if it needs more.

1 comment:

Tamarack said...

Leave it alone, Ben -- the metaphor is just fine the way it is.

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