Tuesday, February 20, 2007

Cake and Cahks

You baked me a cake
And full
and Delicate
With subtle icing
And a candle on top
Then you shoved yourself down my throat
Following that cake
Trying to take it back?

1 comment:

Luke said...

Good contrast - I like how the tone changes well between the two ideas. Is there anyway the end could keep that contrast going instead of posing a rather open question? I like the stronger feel in the second half, and it could work well to keep on.

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